Beautiful. I really think I would make poppies nod the first stanza and move "last night's dreams are healed/etc..." the third stanza. I thought you might close with "sun imposes" which sounded gentle at the beginning as you had it, but lost something when placed at the end of the poem. I wondered about the word "impose" it seemed too severe for the beauty of the poppies, looked it up and found: Syn: Inflict, place, set, forced. Verb: Force (something unwelcome or unfamiliar) to be accepted or put in place: "the decision was theirs and was not imposed on them". Forcibly put (a restriction) in place. I too see morning as that oblivious happy child though, maybe in the title?
Beautiful. I really think I would make poppies nod the first stanza and move "last night's dreams are healed/etc..." the third stanza. I thought you might close with "sun imposes" which sounded gentle at the beginning as you had it, but lost something when placed at the end of the poem. I wondered about the word "impose" it seemed too severe for the beauty of the poppies, looked it up and found: Syn: Inflict, place, set, forced. Verb: Force (something unwelcome or unfamiliar) to be accepted or put in place: "the decision was theirs and was not imposed on them". Forcibly put (a restriction) in place. I too see morning as that oblivious happy child though, maybe in the title?
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